Okay, well it took me longer than I thought to have enough free time to sit down and work with this, but now I have done so. Here is my first revision. Please let me know what you think. I've tried not to make any major creative changes -- I've gotten the instruments as close as I could and just worked on the mastering. Let me know what you like and don't like, and any areas in which I can improve it further.
http://www.dannystewart.com/upload/untitled.mp3
Here's a list of instrumentation used:
Acoustic: Upright Bass (from Colossus)
Electric: Lakland Pick (from Colossus)
Bass: Fat Rock Pick (from Colossus)
Drums: Pro Kit (from Colossus)
Strings: F 18V QLeg (from EWQLSO Gold)
Violin Solo: F 18V Butter Legato (from EWQLSO Gold)
Cello: F VCS QLeg Sord (from EWQLSO Gold)
Trombone: F 4TB Sus (from EWQLSO Gold)
If any of that is wrong or could be improved, please let me know! I'm happy to work on this as much as you like.
Effects used were Logic's Space Designer reverb (on Bright Hall setting), as well as some significant compression (also courtesy of Logic).