Originally Posted by Zeo
Ok cool debate over. Can we get to the feedback now please? 
P.S Thanks to Danny, Ben, Kody and Dr Videoman for your support.  |
FYI, I used to do the "let's all get along" thing. I gave up on being a perfect, friendly forum admin years ago. I'm perfectly happy to bash people on my site who are being idiots. Not only are you not being an idiot, but you're also looking for serious feedback and trying to improve. Both pluses in my book.
First of all, the tempo. I just looked into it for you and it should be at 120 bpm. It's honestly hard to properly listen and pick things out of the mix at 140 bpm, so I may miss some things I would otherwise comment on.
First main comment is that you're missing the theme's "second layer" (if you don't know what that is, see
here or
here). There isn't one during the bridge, but there is one after the bridge (although it's fucking weird—John Debney really didn't get the bassline).
Your note timings are also a bit too rigid, like they've been snapped too tightly to a grid. For example in melody 1, during the second half, when the notes fall back down to B they go "daa-daa-daaaa" instead of "daaaaaa-da-daaaa." That may not make any sense to you and I may have to make you an audio demo but I'm lazy so hopefully you'll understand that.
Anyway, start there, whip me up a second draft, and I'll continue to comment then.